Many manufactured food and drink products contain high levels of sugar, which causes many health problem. Sugary products should be made more expensive to encourage people to consume less sugar. Do you agree or disagree?
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will decrease the number of diabetics, Use synonyms
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of the most critical disease-sharing human deaths, even though it will be hard for them to apply as soon as possible because of their culture and economy.
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might be able to handle the problem. Use synonyms
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products
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drinks that we can find in the supermarket, Use synonyms
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the price is relatively higher.
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On the other hand
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of economics in the society. Use synonyms
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have a routine activity of having a cup of coffee or tea every day going with the cigarette, which is not good for their health. The Linking Words
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products
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people
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level
that aligns with my opinion. Use synonyms
However
, some ideas come from different perspectives that can be difficult to apply regardless of the culture and financial society.Linking Words
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