Many manufactured food and drink products contain high levels of sugar, which causes many health problem. Sugary products should be made more expensive to encourage people to consume less sugar. Do you agree or disagree?
There is a statement that the production of sweet
products
consisting of a lot of sugar
should be reduced by food and drink companies because it can generate serious problems for health status. Moreover
, those products
must be improved to have high prices so that the citizens will avoid using more sugar
for their meals. I strongly agree that less sugar
in dairy products
will decrease the number of diabetics, one
of the most critical disease-sharing human deaths, even though it will be hard for them to apply as soon as possible because of their culture and economy.
On the one
hand, I believe that high sugar
consumption tends to stimulate the sugar
in the blood uncontrolled, which increases the risk of diabetic condition. In 2021, Indonesia came to 7th place based on the number of people
who suffered from the sugar
level
, reaching almost one
million patients, and in a short time, they will die. Therefore
, reducing the sugar
level
in the meal and drinking products
might be able to handle the problem. For example
, Coca-Cola is trying to introduce low-sugar
products
with the same quality as high-sugar
drinks that we can find in the supermarket, although
the price is relatively higher.
On the other hand
, some people
argue that the solution will deal with struggle conditions, including culture and the level
of economics in the society. Firstly
, for example
, young children love to consume very sweet products
, such
as candy and commercial milk, almost every day and even their parents introduce them from the first year of their age. Secondly
, young people
also
have a routine activity of having a cup of coffee or tea every day going with the cigarette, which is not good for their health. The last
is delicious Indonesian food because of sugar
cane's sweetness. Those conditions are related to the very affordable sugar
price, which is not a piece of cake to change. As a result
, applying the regulation to increase the cost of sweet products
will cause many enemies, such
as parents, young people
, and food stalls.
To sum up
, the increased cost of sweet products
will solve one
of the health problems, in this
case, which is the blood sugar
level
that aligns with my opinion. However
, some ideas come from different perspectives that can be difficult to apply regardless of the culture and financial society.Submitted by soniandriawan1992 on
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