The chart below shows how average middle income families spent their household budget in two different years.

The charts illustrated the average middle-income families spent their household in 2015 and 2020. It seems that there were some changes in their spending tendency in some sectors. In 2015,
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allocation
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in the average middle-income
families
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was spent on housing for 35% (the most
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allocation
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among the others).
Subsequently
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, food/clothes and vacations were the second most important things to spend, which is 25% for each. After that, the smallest proposition figure fell to 15% on misc. In 2020, fortunately, the housing sector figures didn’t decrease,
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, it
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significantly for half a decade from 35% to 50%. The second most
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allocation
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was fell on food/clothes, it was increased from 25% to 35% in 2020. Followed by vacations/leisure for 10%
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the other things for 5%. In general, some sectors spending in household
budget
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allocation
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were increasing for half a decade
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as housing and food/clothes.
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, vacations/leisure and others were decreased quite significantly.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "otherwise".
Vocabulary: Replace the words budget, allocation with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "fell" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "significantly" was used 2 times.
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