The graph below shows the changes in the maximum number of Asian elephants between 1997 and 2004

The graph below shows the changes in the maximum number of Asian elephants between 1997 and 2004
The given bar graph illustrates the variations in the maximum
number
of Asian
elephants
in nine different countries: Vietnam, India, Malaysia,
srilanka
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Sri Lanka
Srilanka
, Cambodia, Laos, Myanmar, Thailand, and
china
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China
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in two separate years:1997 and 2004. The
number
of
elephants
in Vietnam, Sri Lanka and Myanmar fell slightly from 1200,3000, and 5300 in 1997 to 1100,2800, and 4800 in 2004 respectively.
However
the
number
of
elephants
in India, which was the highest
decrease
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gradually from 9900 to 7500.
On the other
hand
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there was a sharp decrease for Malaysia and Thailand from 3000 and 3800 to 1100 and 1300 in the same order. For
china
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China
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, the
number
fell by half from 1000 to 500.With regard to Laos, the
number
of
elephants
didn’t change and stood at 1100, and Cambodia was the only country which had a slight rise.
Overall
, it can
been
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seen that except
Cambodia
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for Cambodia
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, there was a continuous fall in the
number
of
elephants
for all other countries.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, elephants with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 5 times.
Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "fell" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.

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  • Ecological balance
  • Fluctuate
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