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The map shows the centre of Paris. A company wants to open a new restaurant in the area. The map shows two possible locations for the restaurant.

The map shows the centre of Paris. A company wants to open a new restaurant in the area. The map shows two possible locations for the restaurant.
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 two possible locations of
a resturantesin
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restaurants in
 the lovely city
Paris
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. Noticeable the
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 of the feature in each place.
currently
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 the most
apealing loction
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appealing location
 is the one next to the Eiffel Tour, which is important to gain the tourist
attintion
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attention
 towards the eatery. in the other location is
sutable
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suitable
 to and would bring a people
attintion
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attention
 since it surrounded by the museum and the park ,the river .
clearly
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 both
resturantes
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restaurants
restaurant
bing
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 in
the
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significant locations in
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downtown
of
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paris
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.
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result
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the
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they
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 will be
seccessful
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successful
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • proximity
  • attractions
  • landmarks
  • boost business
  • public transportation
  • accessibility
  • upscale neighborhood
  • demographic
  • premium
  • menu items
  • competition
  • market saturation
  • rental costs
  • operational costs
  • profit margins
  • foot traffic
  • amenities
  • business offices
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