IELTS Writing Correction Service
Writing Samples
Band 5.5

In their advertising, businesses nowadays usually emphasise that their products are new in someway.why is this? Do you think it is positive or negative development?

In today's world, the significant rise in businesses and marketing has been noticed worldwide and so
do
Verb problem
has
show examples
 the
competitions
Fix the agreement mistake
competition
show examples
 with other business competitors.
An advertising
Remove the article
Advertising
show examples
 became the foremost medium of increasing sales of the
company
Use synonyms
.
While
Linking Words
 promoting their
products
Use synonyms
, they draw the public's attention to some features that are different and latest in certain ways. In my perspective, the development is positive in many situations which will be discussed in
the
Correct article usage
a
show examples
further
Linking Words
 essay.
Firstly
Linking Words
, there can be so many reasons behind highlighting some
products
Use synonyms
while
Linking Words
 promoting. one of the main and important reasons is increasing their
company
Use synonyms
's sales through that
product
Use synonyms
 on which they might have invested a good amount of
money
Use synonyms
 to achieve success.
For example
Linking Words
, Mukesh Ambani's reliance
company
Use synonyms
 has spent so much
money
Use synonyms
 on advertising their newly launched SIM card
as well as
Linking Words
 giving
so
Rephrase
apply
show examples
many deals on different amount purchases. The idea behind it was succeded and it is seen that the reliance
company
Use synonyms
 has been trending since it became famous among the public.
In addition
Linking Words
, after achieving success with
this
Linking Words
product
Use synonyms
 they
also
Linking Words
 launched other
productsproducts
Correct your spelling
products
 which will not take too long to get famous because of their reputation in the market.
Secondly
Linking Words
, It has a positive impact on
people
Use synonyms
 because
people
Use synonyms
 want affordable and good services for what they are spending
money
Use synonyms
 on. The community watches the promoted things and they get to know what is the new thing about that
product
Use synonyms
 and what conditions it has
as well as
Linking Words
 whether it is affordable or not which will
also
Linking Words
 spread awareness in
people
Use synonyms
 about market scams with those
products
Use synonyms
.
Furthermore
Linking Words
, they
also
Linking Words
 advertise how to check the
product
Use synonyms
 accurately so
people
Use synonyms
 will not waste their
money
Use synonyms
 on fake
products
Use synonyms
.
For instance
Linking Words
, there are so many advertisements related to
gold
Use synonyms
 malls and they
also
Linking Words
 inform
people
Use synonyms
 about how to check
Use synonyms
gold
Correct article usage
the gold
show examples
 mark on that jewellery to check whether it is pure
gold
Use synonyms
 or made with less amount of
gold
Use synonyms
.
To conclude
Linking Words
, advertising is important for both the sellers and the buyers for their own profit and awareness. It is up to that person whether to take that
product
Use synonyms
 or not.
However
Linking Words
, sometimes advertising is taken in the wrong way which can put us in danger. So, if it is something good for the community, it is a positive development.

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site's author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

coherence cohesion
Ensure each paragraph has a clear topic sentence and smooth transitions between ideas for improved coherence.
task achievement
Address counterarguments or alternative perspectives to provide a more balanced response.
introduction conclusion present
The introduction clearly sets up the topic and outlines the writer's perspective, providing a strong start to the essay.
relevant specific examples
Relevant and specific examples, such as the Reliance company, help support the main points effectively.
introduction conclusion present
The conclusion effectively summarizes the main points, reinforcing the writer's stance on the topic.

Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 250 words in writing task 2. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long essay will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 260 to 290 words in writing task 2. This will ensure a concise essay and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 40 minutes to write the essay and you need around 10 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long essay in 30 minutes.

Discover more tips in The Ultimate Guide to Get a Target Band Score of 7+ »- a book that's free for 🚀 Premium users.

What to do next:
Look at other essays: