Some people do not like changes and prefer to do things they are good at, while other people like taking risks and trying new things. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
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beneficial
while
others say that taking risks and trying new tasks are good. This
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and I strongly agree with the latter opinion for the following reasons.
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means it leads to avoiding any troubles when trying new things
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instead
of frequently changing new ones. To be more precise, psychological problems would be
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life
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lives
Hence
, do not change and make preference is good.
In contrast
, taking risks and trying new things
that makes meaningful lives besides
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boredom
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For instance
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a stake
due to
tasting new experience
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experiences
Therefore
, choices are brought
more benefits to the population.
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not taking riske
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risks
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that
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avoiding
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explorer
, which heves to get new experiences Correct article usage
an explorer
along with
more happiness. However
, in my opinion, about
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