The graph below shows the number of shops that closed and number of new shops that opened in one country between 2011 and 2018
The line graph below illustrates the
amount
of new and old, which is
opened and closed respectively, with the range 2011 and 2018.
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are
Overall
, number
of Correct article usage
the number
shops
which closures was leader
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a leader
the leader
in
every year, except Change preposition
apply
2011
.
The Change preposition
in 2011
amount
of opening Change the quantifier
number
shops
fell dramatically from 2011 to 2012 and started to increase until 2014, with 4000 number of
Correct quantifier usage
apply
shops
. While
,
other figure decreased slightly and it is Remove the comma
apply
number
was more
bigger than openings Change the word
apply
shops
approximately for 2000 number
of shops
. Furthemore
, Correct your spelling
Furthermore
this
index fluctuaued
from 2012 to 2014 with between 6000 and 7000 Correct your spelling
fluctuated
fluctuates
amount
of shops
and decreased dramatically until 2015 and had less than 1000 shops
.
Openings shops
had same
Change the article
a same
the same
number
of shops
in 2012 and in 2015, between this
year it fluctuated from range
Correct article usage
a range
4000
and slightly more than 6000 Change preposition
of 4000
and
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apply
this
figure did not rose
or down between 2015 and 2016, but fell Wrong verb form
rise
until
3000 Change preposition
to
number
of shops
in 2018. While
, amount
of closures shops
rice dramaticallu
until 2016 and had 5000 Correct your spelling
dramatically
number
of shops
in 3 years, more precisely in 2016, 2017 and 2018.Submitted by bizhanalikhan6 on
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Vocabulary: Replace the words amount, number, shops with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 6 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "fell" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "dramatically" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
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