The diagram below shows how a biofuel called ethanol is produced
The provided diagram illustrates the production of a biofuel namely ethanol
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including 7 main stages, beginning with trees obtaining energy from sunlight and carbon dioxide and ending with public transport releasing the carbon dioxide into the atmosphere.
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for more details, first of all, planted plants are qualified to be harvested by a harvester. Use synonyms
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, these plants undergo pre-processing in factories where they are crushed in a grinding machine and converted into cellulose. Linking Words
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the processed cellulose will experience a chemical Linking Words
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and transform into sugars.
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Thirdly
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continues with the sugars combined with added microbes and producing ethanol. Use synonyms
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ethanol is used for operating public vehicles. After that, these vehicles emit carbon dioxide into the atmosphere. Linking Words
Finally
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gas is synthesized with sunlight with the purpose of providing energy to the plants and Linking Words
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cycle continues again.Linking Words
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