The table shows the Proportions of Pupils Attending Four Secondary School Types Between Between 2000 and 2009. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The given table describes
about
the comparison of pupils attending Remove the preposition
apply
from
four secondary school types in 2000, 2005, and 2009.
As is shown by the table, we can see that the number of school attendance from community Change preposition
apply
schools
had
increased from 2000 to 2009, Unnecessary verb
apply
while
voluntary-controlled schools
had an
opposite trend.
Looking in more detail, in 2000 community Correct article usage
the
schools
proportion was 12% and have
started to Unnecessary verb
apply
growing
in 2005 (32%) before it reached the vertex in 2009 (58%). Change the form of the verb
grow
On the other hand
, voluntary-controlled schools
had peak
in 2000 (52%) before it fell to the lowest point with 20% in 2009. Meanwhile, grammar Correct article usage
a peak
schools
had a stable trend between 2000 and 2009 with 12%, 11%, and 10%, respectively. Lastly
, Special Schools
only had a small proportion of the school attendance with downward trends. In 2000, it was only 12% and slightly decreased to 11% and 10% in 2005 and 2009, respectively.Submitted by rasyidrahma13 on
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words schools with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 3 times.
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