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the charts shows the number of birds in Wollai Park between 1990 and 2010 Summerize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, make comparisons where nessesary

the charts shows the number of birds in Wollai Park between 1990 and 2010 Summerize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, make comparisons where nessesary
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The diagram illustrates the
number
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 of bird
species
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 in Wollai Park in 20 years between 1990 and 2010.
Overall
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,
while
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 the graph exhibits frequent oscillations between 5 types of
birds
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, most of the
number
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 of every bird
species
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 generally decreases at a certain level.
Nevertheless
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, some roughly plateaued at the same amount
at the end
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, and some dwindled significantly. On the one hand, the parrots and the swallows seem to be maintained at the initial amount.
Initially
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, the parrots'
population
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 was between 0.8 and 0.7 and virtually the same in 2010,
however
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, the
population
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 met its apex around 1995 at 900
birds
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, keeping themselves to be the largest in the pool of bird
species
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 - after exceeding the Kookaburras and crows between 1990 and 1995. In the case of the swallows, not only did it continue to be the lowest in the numbers of the
species
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,
while
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 the
population
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 was between 300 and 200
birds
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 and reached its lowest in 2005 with 100
birds
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, it returned to 200
birds
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 in 2010.
On the other hand
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, the
number
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 of crows has decreased consistently and lost 300
birds
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 in the 20-year interval, with its initial amount reaching 900
birds
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 as the highest
number
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 in 1990. The kookaburras ,
nevertheless
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, lost twofold of what the crows have lost with the same starting
number
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 of the
population
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. Interestingly, in the whip
birds
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’ cases, it lost 40% of its
population
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, making it having less than 300
birds
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 in 2010.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "nevertheless, while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, species, birds, population with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreases" was used 2 times.
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