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The pie charts show energy sources in Australia in 2008 and predictions for 2030

The pie charts show energy sources in Australia in 2008 and predictions for 2030
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The given charts display the utilization of
energy
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 sources in Australia in 2008 and the prediction for 2030.
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, in 2008 the main
source
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 of
energy
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 was coal with 39% and the percentage usage of wind and hydro
were
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 at the minimum. It is predicted that in 2030 the main
source
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 of
energy
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 will be oil and gas.
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, a new renewable
source
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 of
energy
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 called geothermal will be used
about
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 5%. In 2008, the main
source
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 of
energy
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 in Australia was coal, oil and gas with 39%, 32% and 23% respectively.
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, summing up the other sources of
energy
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and
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solar was about 6% of utilization and wind and hydro were the minimum percentage with 0.3% and 0.2% respectively. In 2030, it is projected the level of
main
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source
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 of
energy
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 will be changed in comparison with 2008. So, oil, gas and coal with 35% , 32% and 27% respectively will be the critical resources of
energy
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. The new renewable
source
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 of
energy
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 named geothermal which did not exist in 2008 will be projected to achieve about 5% of consumption. The other
source
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 of
energy
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 will be the same in 2008. The proportion of wind and hydro will be grown gently and will touch 1.20% and 0.7% respectively.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words energy, source with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.
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