When we meet someone for the first time, we generally decide very quickly what kind of person we think they are and if we like them or not. Is this a good thing or a bad thing?
It often happens that
people
tend to decide whether or not they like a person although
it is the first time to see each other. It is natural for human beings but I personally believe that this
tendency is not an ideal habit.
Firstly
, one might lose the opportunity to become friend
who is actually Add an article
a friend
the friend
warm hearted
if they judge the person by Add a hyphen
warm-hearted
the
appearances or their behaviours. At work, Change the word
their
for instance
, new starters tend to think that senior workers are unapproachable and they try to avoid interacting with them. However
, those experienced people
might be simply taking their jobs seriously but they are friendly outside of the office. If newcomers approach the senior workers without judging them, they will have benefits such
as being taught how to handle their tasks efficiently.
On the other hand
, some are very excellent at reading others. It may be argued that they would not need to waste their time if they could see who
to like and see each other on a regular basis immediately. Change the pronoun
whom
However
, even if they can quickly know what kind of people
they are, it is a great opportunity for them to develop their personalities. This
is because there is a wide range of people
out there and if individuals try to interact with them without judging, they will be able to expand their thoughts, which will help them to develop their personalities.
To conclude
, although
there are both sides of arguments on this
given statement, as far as I am concerned, one should not decide very quickly whether or not they like the person who
they meet for the first time.Change the pronoun
whom
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Your essay addresses the topic well and provides a balanced argument. However, strive for clearer topic sentences and more elaboration on each main point to enhance clarity and depth.
coherence cohesion
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coherence cohesion
Your introduction effectively sets up the discussion and your conclusion convincingly summarizes your viewpoint.
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You offer relevant examples, such as the workplace scenario, which enrich your argument and make your points more credible.
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