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in many countries today, crime novels and tv crime dramas are becoming more and more popular. why do you things these tv shows and books are popular what is your opinion of crime fictions and tv dramas

#countries #crime #novels #tv #dramas #books #fictions
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crime
 novels and
TV
crime
 dramas
are
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larger
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 audience worldwide,
due to
 their capacity to hook the reader and the realism and real facts that are
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involved
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 are a public interest, I believe they should be
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. the essay will argue
this
, and I will provide my opinion. In the past few years, novels and
TV
 shows about criminology are
rasing
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raising
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 their
audence
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audience
,
due to
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audience
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number
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audience
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consecuence
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consequence
a
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big
developing
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this
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 invested in the past 10 years more than 10 billion dollars in the development of
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convice
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convince
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it
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 audience.
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, everyone knows about their populism, I
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believe
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 that
TV
 shows and novels related
with
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crimes
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crime
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 should be baned,
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because
 it has
an
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the
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 incredible power of encouraging new generations to commit
crime
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crimes
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, leading to,
no
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not
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 only a major
number
 of
crime
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crimes
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, but
also
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a quiz in Argentina
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85% are feeling bad thoughts after watching
crime realated
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crime-related
 movies or series.
To sum up
,
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 the increasing
number
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audence
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audience
,
due to
it
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its
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 capacity of hooking,
as
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apply
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we can
compared
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compare
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 with
real life
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real-life
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 cases. I believe
this
 gender should be
baned
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banned
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 from
TV
 and libraries because it
lead
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leads
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 to raising the
number
 of
crime
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crimes
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 and violence on the streets.
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