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You recently received a letter from a friend asking for advice about whether to go to college or to try to get a job. You think he/she should get a job. Write a letter to this friend. In your letter •say why he/she would not enjoy going to college •explain why getting a job is a good idea for him/her •suggest types of job that would be suitable for him/her

#friend #advice #college #job #•say #•explain #idea #•suggest
Dear Brown, I hope
this
 email finds you well. We’re doing well. How are you , my brother? I received your letter that it is time to make the decision for your next step. I think you’ve spent enough time studying, and now you’re not going to be so happy when you back to college because it is your right age to get work experience in your profession. I’m sure your knowledge is enough for working as an engineer in the field because you did done internship before you graduated the college
last
 year.
Also
, you should try to solve your financial problem because you aren’t a kid anymore. I have an idea what should be your first step. You need to prepare your resume
according to
 your background, and
then
 you should start enrolling in
the
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IT companies to find the right work for you. Best Regards, Eric ß
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structure
Ensure that your ideas are clearly structured and each paragraph focuses on a separate point for better coherence.
vocabulary
Try to use a more varied vocabulary and avoid repetition to enhance the quality of your writing.
task response
You've addressed all parts of the task effectively, giving your opinion, explaining reasons, and suggesting job types.
tone
The letter has a friendly and appropriate tone, which suits the task of writing to a friend.
format
You successfully incorporated a greeting and closing in your letter, which is great for format.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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You are not ready for IELTS Speaking, if you

  • Can’t speak smoothly without pauses.
  • Use simple words and lack vocabulary.
  • Feel nervous and anxious when speaking.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • theoretical nature
  • real-world experience
  • practical experience
  • professional network
  • financial independence
  • dynamic
  • on-the-job learning
  • creative industries
  • customer service
  • sectors
  • suitable
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