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In many countries nowadays consumers can go to a supermarket and buy food produced all over the world. do you think this a postive or negative development? give resons for your answer and include relevant examples?

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It is widely known that
supermarkets
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 are the most efficient way to buy food, groceries, and other household
items
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.
Supermarkets
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 offer a wide variety of
products
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, some of which may be imported from overseas markets. Some individuals believe that only locally grown
products
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 should be sold in these stores,
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 imported goods should be available
elsewhere
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.
This
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 essay will explore both sides of the argument to reach a conclusion.
Firstly
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,
instead
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 of completely banning
products
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 from overseas, governments could impose higher tariffs on imported goods.
This
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 would encourage
supermarkets
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 to prioritize locally grown
products
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.
This
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 tactic would be especially effective in preventing large supermarket chains from importing commonly consumed
items
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 like flour, milk, and eggs from cheaper foreign markets. By doing so, local farmers would be fairly compensated for their hard work,
thus
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 supporting local economic growth.
On the other hand
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, certain
items
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 are not grown locally. A good example is dates, which are typically cultivated in hot, dry countries like Dubai.
Products
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 that cannot be produced locally should still be imported, allowing consumers to enjoy food and cuisine from a wide range of cultures.
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 would ensure that customers have access to a greater variety of foods, enhancing their shopping experience. In conclusion, I believe that governments should ensure that
locally grown
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locally-grown
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 produce is prioritized in
supermarkets
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 by imposing higher taxes on imported goods, especially those that can be produced locally.
However
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, for
items
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 that are not locally available, taxes should be kept minimal to allow consumers to enjoy a diverse selection of foods in their everyday meals.

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task achievement
The essay has a clear and concise introduction that sets the stage for the discussion.
coherence cohesion
The use of cohesive devices like 'Firstly,' 'On the other hand,' and 'In conclusion' helps in smoothly transitioning between points, making the essay easy to follow.
coherence cohesion
The essay concludes effectively by summarizing the main points and restating the opinion, which provides a sense of closure.

Your opinion

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Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

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...do you agree or disagree?...do you think...?...your opinion...?

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