The table and charts below give information on the police budget for 2017 and 2018 in one area of Britain. The table shows where the money came from and the charts show how it was distributed.

The table and charts below give information on the police budget for 2017 and 2018 in one area of Britain. The table shows where the money came from and the charts show how it was distributed.
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The given table and pie charts illustrate the money incomes and expenditures of police in one area of Britain between 2017 and 2018. Units are measured in euros.
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, it can be seen that both financial sources and consumption had the same budget and spent, respectively. The national government became the biggest resource, whilst other sources had the smallest
income
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from 2017 and 2018.
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, salaries and technology were the highest and lowest percentage of police consumption over the period. In terms of the most
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source and consumption, respectively,
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government experienced a slight increase
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precisely 2.3m from 2017 to 2018,
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salaries dropped moderately from three quarters to 69%. Regards of the lowest
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and expenditure, other sources
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police
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budget remained stable by 0.5m. Meanwhile, technology rose significantly to 14% in 2018.
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, local taxes and buildings and transport were in the middle source of
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and money spent, respectively. Local taxes had a drastic growth
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11.1m
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technology increased
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by just below a half from 2017 to 2018.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words income with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "give" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • budget allocation
  • funding sources
  • government policies
  • economic conditions
  • community services
  • crime prevention
  • public safety
  • significant increase/decrease
  • distribution
  • assessment
  • reflection
  • allocation shifts
  • budget comparison
  • impact analysis
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