The chart shows air pollution levels among four countries in 2012.
The chart provides information about
air
pollution
levels among four countries in 2012. We can see from the chart that China’s air
more pollution
than other Replace the word
polluted
countaries
. Less Correct your spelling
countries
pollution
air
in Australia. It is between 20 and 15.
In China industry
harm
more than Correct subject-verb agreement
harms
transport
and electricity
generation
. But in America transport
have
Correct subject-verb agreement
has
bad
Correct article usage
a bad
affect
Replace the word
effect
about
55 per. Change preposition
of about
Industry
be
after Correct subject-verb agreement
is
transport
but before electricity
generation
.In Japan also
industry
is one of the big problem
like in China because of Change to a plural noun
problems
it
Change the pronoun
its
level
about
40 per. Change preposition
of about
Electricity
generation
harm
only nine and ten per. It is Correct subject-verb agreement
harms
best
result in four countries. Only in one country Change the article
the best
all
three things Add a missing verb
do all
that
Correct pronoun usage
apply
shows
Change the verb form
show
air
pollution
levels no
more than 20 per. It is Change preposition
of no
fourth
country Australia. Correct article usage
the fourth
Also
Add a comma
Also,
industry
and transport
are same level
about 18 and 19. Their Change the noun form
levels
persent
no more than Correct your spelling
present
electricity
generation
.
In general, electricity
generation
have
less Change the verb form
has
air
pollution
level
in four
Correct article usage
the four
country
. Change to a plural noun
countries
Industry
pollution
level
in China, America and Japan more
than 47 per.Add a missing verb
is more
Submitted by dnm.best on
Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.
Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
▼
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
▼
Linking words: Add more linking words.
▼
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 86%.
▼
Vocabulary: Replace the words air, pollution, industry, transport, electricity, generation, level with synonyms.
▼
Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
▼
Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
▼
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 4 times.
▼
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
▼