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The chart shows air pollution levels among four countries in 2012.

The chart shows air pollution levels among four countries in 2012.
#air #pollution #levels #four #countries
The chart provides information about
air
pollution
 levels among four countries in 2012. We can see from the chart that China’s
air
 more
pollution
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polluted
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 than other
countaries
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countries
. Less
pollution
air
 in Australia. It is between 20 and 15. In China
industry
harm
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harms
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 more than
transport
 and
electricity
generation
. But in America
transport
have
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has
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bad
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a bad
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affect
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effect
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about
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of about
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 55 per.
Industry
be
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is
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 after
transport
 but before
electricity
generation
.In Japan
also
industry
 is one of the big
problem
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problems
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 like in China because of
it
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its
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level
about
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of about
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 40 per.
Electricity
generation
harm
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harms
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 only nine and ten per. It is
best
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the best
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 result in four countries. Only in one country
all
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do all
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 three things
that
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apply
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shows
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show
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air
pollution
 levels
no
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of no
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 more than 20 per. It is
fourth
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the fourth
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 country Australia.
Also
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Also,
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industry
 and
transport
 are same
level
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levels
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 about 18 and 19. Their
persent
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present
 no more than
electricity
generation
. In general,
electricity
generation
have
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has
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 less
air
pollution
level
 in
four
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the four
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country
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countries
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.
Industry
pollution
level
 in China, America and Japan
more
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is more
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 than 47 per.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
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Linking words: Add more linking words.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 86%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words air, pollution, industry, transport, electricity, generation, level with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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