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The graph below shows different sources of air pollutants in the UK from 1990 to 2005. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make

The graph below shows different sources of air pollutants in the UK from 1990 to 2005. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make
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The graph displays various sources that cause
air
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 pollution in the United Kingdom between the
years
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 1990 and 2005.
Overall
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, the total amount of released
air
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pollutants
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 decreased from 1990 to 2005, and it can be seen that the highest pollution was caused by
industry
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the industry
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sector
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than
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rather than
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transport
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by transport
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 and
households
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. Industrial chemicals declined dramatically from over 5
million
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tones
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tonnes
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 to 3
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millions
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million
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 between 1990 and 1996.
Also
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, it continued decreasing slightly to 2
million
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tonnes
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at the end
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 of 2005.
However
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,
this
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sector
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 had the highest amount of toxic gas released than two other sources for all the
years
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 between 1990 and 2005.
On the other hand
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, the amount of
air
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 pollution caused by both
households
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 and transportation fluctuated
in
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over
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 15
years
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. In those
years
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,
transportation
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the transportation
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sector
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 used a little more
air
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pollutants
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 than
households
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. Both sectors produced almost 1
million
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tonnes
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 of toxic gases in 1990, the amounts of
pollutants
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 became distant in 2005 after they were closer in 1999.
Transport
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The transport
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sector
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 released 1
million
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tonnes
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 of
pollutnats
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pollutants
 whilst
households
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 caused almost none in 2005. It can be said that the total value of
air
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pollutants
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 decreased dramatically twice 7
million
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tonnes
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 to 4
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millions
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million
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, and 4
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millions
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million
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 to 2
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millions
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million
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 between the
years
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 1990 and 1999, and 1999 and 2005 respectively.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words air, years, pollutants, sector, households, million, millions, tonnes with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "dramatically" was used 2 times.
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