You recently joined a new fitness center and have been attending various classes. Write a letter to the fitness center manager to express your thoughts, experiences, and suggestions.

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Dear Mr. Lambert, I am one of the members of your
sport
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club and I am writing
this
letter to share my experience
about
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the courses that I have
done
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. Actually, I have some
recommendation
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that may be functional for the improvement of your
center
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. I attended to TRX course
last
month and I really liked the atmosphere of the class; the trainer was truly an expert in his job, and he knew how to communicate and motivate every single person.
However
, the area that had been considered for the sessions was extremely wide, the air was not acceptable, and the air conditioner was not working really well; I think it
will
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be better
,
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if we could have fresh air.
In addition
, the quality of the Sports equipment
are
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perfect, but they are not managed. In my opinion, it
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be great if a person could take control over items
such
as lockers, keys, and sports sets; in
this
way, they will not break or
loose
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. I have a strong tendency to continue my routine exercises in your
center
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, and I keenly regard your response. Respectfully, Ghazaleh Shadman
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coherence cohesion
Consider ensuring that each paragraph focuses on a single idea to improve clarity. For instance, separate the issues with the TRX course area and the air quality into distinct paragraphs.
coherence cohesion
While the letter is mostly clear and informative, structuring it with more distinct paragraphs can further enhance readability and coherence. Try beginning a new paragraph for each main point or suggestion.
task achievement
The letter effectively addresses the task by providing both experiences and suggestions, ensuring a complete response.
task achievement
The tone of the letter is polite and respectful, making it suitable for formal communication.

The Closing

The style of the letter determine how you have to close it.

Check out the suggested closing sentences for each type of letter in the General IELTS Test. The closing sentence should be the last sentence of your letter.

Formal style (To someone you have not met, whose name you don’t know)

  • Yours faithfully,

Semi-formal (To someone you may or may not have met, whose last name you know)

  • Yours sincerely,

Informal (To someone you know well, whose first name you know and use)

  • Best regards,
  • Warm wishes,

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