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The bar chart shows the monthly spending in dollars of a family in the USA on three items in 2010. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart shows the monthly spending in dollars of a family in the USA on three items in 2010. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The given bar graph illustrates the monthly expenditures of a family on three different
items
, consisting of food, gas, and clothing in the USA in 2010. It is clear from the graph that expenses for clothing had the highest peak compared to other
items
 in different months,
while
 the average had slightly downward trends over the period. In January 2020, the average recurring spending every month for all the
items
 was near to 400 dollars and
this
 remained until the first next month.
Although
, there was a rise in Mar before it decreased in the rest of time.
On the other hand
, Clothing had rapid change before it reached its peak in April. Other than that, expenses for gas were only about 300 dollars in January before they went down and eventually rose for the rest period.
Lastly
, food is the only
items
Fix the agreement mistake
item
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 that had a downward trend compared to
others
Correct quantifier usage
other
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items
 with
final
Correct article usage
a final
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 amount
about
Change preposition
of about
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