The table and the pie charts illustrate the number of people who visited Ashdown Museum before and after refurbishment and the results of surveys of visitor gratification during the same two periods.
The table and the pie charts illustrate the
number
of people
who visited Ashdown Museum before and after refurbishment and the results of surveys of visitor gratification during the same two periods.
What stands out from the table is that after renovation the number
of people
has increased by 18 thousands
, from 74.000 to 92.000.
What stands out from the pie charts is that before reconstruction the Change to singular
thousand
number
of people
was at 15%, and in the next year, it increased by almost a
one quarter, to 35%. Correct article usage
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Likewise
, satisfied ones has
increased by Change the verb form
have
one tenth
, from 30% to 40%. Add a hyphen
one-tenth
However
, dissatisfied humanity plunged to 15%. Moreover
, the number
of very dissatisfied ones halved, from 10% to 5%. And, finally
, people
who had no response has
remained at 5%.Unnecessary verb
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