The chart below shows the number of men and women in further education in Britain in three periods and whether they were studying fulltime or part-time. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the number of men and women in further education in Britain in three periods and whether they were studying fulltime or part-time. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The bar graph compares the
amount
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of men and women in higher education in Britain of two study types, consisting of full-time and part-time education from three different periods. As shown from the graph,
it is clear that
both males and females had the same slightly upward trend of part-time education during the period,
while
the data for the full-time study had different patterns for both genders. Looking in more detail, In 1970 there were almost 1000 male permanent
students
declined near to 800 before it increased slightly to 900.
On the other hand
, permanent female
students
always rose from the initial value and reached a peak of over 1100
at the end
of
period
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the period
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. Other than that, the changes
of
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part-time
students
had
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not significant to the entire
insights
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. In total, there were only about 400 that were recognized as semi-permanent
students
in each time frame from both genders.
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