Small businesses are disappearing and being replaced by large multinational companies. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this for ordinary people?

Nowadays small businesses are vanishing and being changed by large multinational
companies
. In
this
tendency, the impact on people has good
sides
but
also
bad
sides
for them. In
this
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I bring some facts which these facts show us
advantages
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the advantages
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and disadvantages of
this
tendency. On the one hand, replacing
of
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large multinational
companies
brings us more workplaces and standardization for all goods and services. Surely, relating with these types of
companies
always need new workers to perform determined
works
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work
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. By the way, all new workplaces’
given
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give
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to
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employees
allowance money and all of them enhance their
standart
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standard
of living.
Besides
to
this
multinational
companies
give new standardization for all these types of facilities. Goods quality more reliable and
durabel
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durable
.
On the other hand
,replacement small businesses have bad impacts.
First
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disadvantage
i
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could say when
employees
want to apply
these
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to these
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companies
,they have to pass an internship or
they
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apply
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have
educational
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an educational
the educational
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degree to apply for
this
job and
this
is a big problem for the
employees
.In
this
case
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case,
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employees
face issues
to get
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in getting
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a job in these types of
company
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companies
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.
Additionally
to
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this
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apply
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new
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newly
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created
companies
affect
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the values
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values
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value
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of goods in
the
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bad way.New rules,
standardizations
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and standardizations
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bring new prices with them.Surely, all these prices
aren't
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decreased,
on the contrary
, it increased.It is obvious that
,
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life quality is
decrased
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decreased
accordingly
due to
this
tendency. In conclusion,nowadays small businesses are disappearing and being replaced by large multinational
companies
. In
this
situation, the
affect
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effect
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on people not only
have
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has
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good
sides
but
also
bad
sides
for them.
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Good effort in addressing both sides of the argument, discussing both advantages and disadvantages.
coherence cohesion
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coherence cohesion
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