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The charts below show the sales of new cars in Australia in 1994, 2004 and 2013.

The charts below show the sales of new cars in Australia in 1994, 2004 and 2013.
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The pie charts illustrate the sales of private vehicles in Australia during the nineteen years, from 1994 to 2013.
Overall
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, it can be seen that
sedans
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 saw a downward trend,
while
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 others and
SUVs
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 witnessed an upward trend. Another interesting point is that the total number doubled over the period in question. Looking at the details,
sedans
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 were nowhere near as high as
SUVs
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, at 74% and 7%, respectively, making
sedans
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 the number-one category on the list
However
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, in the next year,
SUVs
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 increased by one-tenth,
whereas
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 the latter declined to 62%.
Moreover
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, in the final year,
Sedans
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 fell to 51%, which accounted for half of the pie chart,
while
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SUVs
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 remained at the same point (17%). Regarding the other changes, others started at 19% and grew by 13%, from 19% to 32%. A final change is that the total number of cars began at 42.900 and boomed to 85.000 in the
last
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 year.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words sedans, suvs with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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