The pie charts below show the share of the different brands in 2009 and 2019. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The pie charts illustrate the proportion of
sales
of different devices over the period of one decade.
Overall
, it can be seen from the diagrams the sale of flat-screen TVs, mobile phones, and tablet gadgets hiked, however
, conventional TVs, desktop computers, and laptops shrunk in both years. Conventional TV sales
fall-off dramatically, and tablet sales
increased abruptly.
It is conspicuous that in 2009, the sale of conventional TV was 34% and it declined to 4% in 2009. In addition
, sales
of laptops was 20% in 2009, which plummeted to 21% in 2009 and desktop computers also
performed poorly and the market share was nearly one-fifth, which plunged from 18% to 12% respectively in 2009 and 2019.
Probing ahead, in contrast
, sales
of flat-screen TVs were 8% in 2009 and hiked to more than a quarter (27%) in 2019. Additionally
, desktop computers were sold by 18% in 2009, after ten years it extended by more than a quarter. Finally
, tablets augmented 5% to 19% in the respective years 2009 and 2019.Submitted by rbtech65 on
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words sales with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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