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The table below shows the production of milk in four countries in 1990, 2000 and 2010

The table below shows the production of milk in four countries in 1990, 2000 and 2010
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The given chart delineates the production of milk, in a period of 10 years, from 1990 to 2010, in 4 countries. On the whole,
while
Netherlands
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the Netherlands
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, Tanzania and Guatemala seemed to experience an increase throughout the period, with
Netherlands
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the Netherlands
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was
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at the top place, the opposite is true for Australia.
To begin
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the Netherland
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Netherland
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Netherlands
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 produced the most, about 11,262,000 litres, in 1990.
Then
, it dropped to 11,155,000 just to bounce back
at
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 11,466,000 in 2010. Australia, though its figure slightly
decline
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declined
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 from 11 to 9 million, in 1990 and 2010, respectively, still remained the second-most production country when it comes to milk. Regarding the statistics of Tanzania and Guatemala, the former was tripling the latter, at 87,000 and 26,000.
While
 Guatemala saw an upward trend,
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 up at 84,000,
the
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 similar pattern was seen in Tanzania, with its final figure was 68 thousand larger than the previous one – 155,000.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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