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The graph below shows different sources of air pollutants in the UK from 1990 to 2005. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make

The graph below shows different sources of air pollutants in the UK from 1990 to 2005. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make
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The line graph compares the 3 sources that contribute to
air
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pollution
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 in the UK over 15 years, starting from 1990.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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 the total
air
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pollution
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 retarded significantly over time except for transportation services.
Furthermore
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, industrial
pollution
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 is the main contributor to
air
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pollution
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. In 1990, approximately 5.4
million
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tonnes
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 of industrial waste contributed to
pollution
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.
However
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,
this
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value
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 dramatically declined over the next 6 years and reached 3
million
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tonnes
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. Thereby, it continued to
further
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 decrease and ended as 2
million
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tonnes
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 of industrial waste in 2005.
On the contrary
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, transport and household pollutants followed a trend with slight fluctuations. In 1990, almost 0.5
million
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tonnes
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 of transportation pollutants were exposed to the environment and followed an uptrend by 0.5
million
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tonnes
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.
Next,
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it downtrended and reached its original
value
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 in 1999.
Finally
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, it almost doubled the starting
value
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 in 2005
whereas
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 residential waste
overall
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 dropped minorly to just below the starting
value
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 in 2005.
Moreover
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, the total
air
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 pollutants released decreased more than 2 folds.
Submitted by Witharana Senesh Rasinda Wickramasinghe on

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "overall".
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words air, pollution, million, tonnes, value with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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