People who have original ideas are of much greater value to society than those who are simply able to copy the ideas of others well. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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People
who
are
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simply use other
people
's
ideas
or works are less valuable than
people
who do their works with their capability and create original
ideas
. Only integrated
people
who
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can do
this
thing. I, personally, could not agree more that
people
who rely on their ability to do their own tasks or have fresh
ideas
are really a dedicated
person
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people
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.
This
essay will
shown
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by analysing my personal experience when made a
project
as well as
my sister when did her assignment at campus. To start with, every
projects
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project
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need
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needs
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an original
idea
to make the
project
more interesting by making a new concept. To
illustrates
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, me and my team have a job as
project
planners. At that time, I came
with
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up with
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my own
ideas
to add a new guest star.
However
, my friend stole my
idea
. Because she
does
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not know how to execute the
idea
, the
project
was
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failed.
Thus
, it is very important to use our own
ideas
instead
of using
others
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others'
other's
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idea
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ideas
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.
Besides
, it is common
at
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on
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campus
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to not
doing
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plagiarism, either on
homeworks
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homework
or exams.
For example
, my sister
have
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an
idea
to solve
a
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the
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problem of floods in Yogyakarta by using 3R (Reduce, Reuse, Recycle).
Nonetheles
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Nonetheless
, her friend
use
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used
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that
idea
for another problem but still in
a
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same lecture. When her lecturer knew about it, my sister's friend got an E on her final report. It indicates that
stole
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stealing
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people
's
ideas
is not good to show integrity. As seen above,
people
who have original
ideas
are more appreciated in
the
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society than copying other
ideas
.
This
essay has represented that making projects and doing tasks have to
based
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our
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on our
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own capability and ability.
Therefore
, it can be a reflection to not
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others
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others'
other's
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work.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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