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The maps below show the town of Riverport in 1900 and 2000. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The maps below show the town of Riverport in 1900 and 2000. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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the maps depict
that
Correct word choice
apply
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the difference
of
Change preposition
between
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 the town of Riverport in
tow
Correct your spelling
two
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period
Fix the agreement mistake
periods
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, 1900 and 2000.
Overall
, it can be clearly seen that the particular building in 1900 and green forest were eliminated and decreased,
while
 the traffic systems were developed over time. In 1900, there
are
Wrong verb form
were
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 timber
mill
Fix the agreement mistake
mills
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 and
shipbuilder
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shipbuilders
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 on
upper
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the upper
an upper
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 side
in
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of
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 the map,
however
Add the comma(s)
however,
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in2000
Correct your spelling
in 2000
, they were eliminated and erected two champing
site
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sites
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.
Moreover
 from 1900 to 2000, the warehouse was changed to
art
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an art
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 gallery near the river.
Furthermore
, the green forest and wharves
were
Unnecessary verb
apply
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declined
to
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by
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 one-third.
However
, there
are
Wrong verb form
has been
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big
Correct article usage
a big
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growing
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growth
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 over the period of time.
Firstly
, the main road was extended four times on the west side of the town.
Additionally
,
big
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a big
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 riverside park was established under the river.
Finally
, the railway was developed on the downside of
map
Add an article
the map
a map
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 in 2000. Regarding the location of no-change, there are two
some place
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someplace
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,
town
Correct article usage
the town
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center
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centre
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 and farmland,
those
Correct pronoun usage
which
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 have never changed both location and size over time.
And the
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The
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 location of
main
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the main
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 road, river and forest
were
Correct subject-verb agreement
was
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 not changed in 1900. And 2000.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "maps" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "changed" was used 3 times.
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