The bar graph gives information about the number of people who were in emergency care of different ages at hospital in Northern Ireland in the same of month December of the year 2016 and 2017.
The bar graph gives information about the number of
people
who were in emergency care of different ages at hospital
in Northern Ireland in the same Fix the agreement mistake
hospitals
of
month December of the year 2016 and 2017.
In general, the youngest and the oldest were these Change preposition
apply
groups
which had highest people
for emergency care in these months. In addition
, the patients
in December 2017 were slightly higher than in the month Correct quantifier usage
number of patients
last
year.
It is clearly seen that babies who were under 5 and the
aged 75 and over Correct your spelling
those
people
had higher point
than other Fix the agreement mistake
points
groups
but the people
who were over 74 accounted for the highest point, at around 64 attendances per 1000 population.
Turning to the other groups
of age, the people
who were 5 -15 had the lowest patients
who came to emergency care, just stood at slightly over 20. Correct quantifier usage
number of patients
Moreover
, aged
16 – 74 Correct pronoun usage
those aged
shows
a similar pattern. That Correct subject-verb agreement
show
groups
had approximately 32 Fix the agreement mistake
group
people
who had to visit hospital
in Add an article
the hospital
a hospital
that
months of 2016 and 2017.Correct determiner usage
the
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