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People should work a fixed number of hours per week and employers should not ask anybody to work extra hours. discuss both of views and give your opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Employers should not ask their
employees
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 to
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 extra
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 other than their expected number of
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 per week.
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 idea has some negative and positive consequences. Both sides will be discussed in the following paragraphs. On
one
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 hand, the workload of any business or
company
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 is never streamlined.
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, shopping websites like Amazon are flooded with orders during festive seasons. In
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 situations,
employees
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 are asked to
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 extra
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 to keep the
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 running smoothly.
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, if
employees
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 do not agree to
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 extra on
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 situations,
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 the performance and the reputation of the firm are at risk.
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,
this
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 will affect the
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 themselves in terms of job security and wages.
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,some companies make people
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 extra
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 every day for months to meet a certain deadline.
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this
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, workers' mental health and relationships might be affected.
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 might cause conflicts and may create a pervasive atmosphere at the workplace.
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,
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 may resign quite frequently - in the middle of critical deliverables - and the
company
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 might have to hire and train new
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 again.
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, managers and leaders should focus on setting up realistic expectations and must make sure their underlings are not overloaded.
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, for building a huge
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, you need
employees
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 around who will go the extra mile when times are tough.
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, that does not mean you expect them to do the
work
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 as you wish. There should be a
work
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-life balance , and employers should respect it.

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task
Make your view clear in the start and again in the end. Say your own stance in one line in the intro and restate it in the last paragraph.
task
Add more clear details to back each point. Give one more strong example for extra hours moved by the firm or by a worker.
coherence
Keep ideas in order. Put one view in one paragraph and the other in another. Use linking words to show how points go with each other.
grammar
Check grammar and punctuation. Fix spaces before commas and use correct apostrophes. Use simple, short sentences when you are not sure.
coherence
It shows two sides and tries to give a view.
task
Conclusion shows a balance and a clear stance.
structure
There is a plan with intro, two parts, and a conclusion.
Your opinion

Don’t put your opinion unless you are asked to give it.

If the question asks what you think, you MUST give your opinion to get a good score.

Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

Here are examples of instructions that require you to give your opinion:

...do you agree or disagree?...do you think...?...your opinion...?

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