The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019.

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The line graph illustrates the changes in ownership of

electrical

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device

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devices

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and

amount

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of time

use

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houswork

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housework

housholds

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households

in one country from 1920 to 2019.

overall

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In 1920 the

propotion

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proportion

promotion

refrigetator

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refrigerators

and vacuum

cleaner

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cleaners

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were 2% and 30% respectively.

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However

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the washing machine was the higher percentage among them. The refrigerator From 1920 to 1960 raised

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significance

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increase

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slightly to

arrived

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100% in 1980. After the rate remained constant. 2o years from 1980 to 2000. We

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observed that The vacuum cleaner continued

grew

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from 1920 to 1980 and the

precentage

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percentage

percentages

were 30% and 90% respectively.

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In 1980 the

propation

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probation

proportion

climbed slowly to

2000

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year. The rate

among

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2000 and 2019 was unchanged

100

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% . The

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temper

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hourse

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hours

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1920 and 2019. In 1920,

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housework was very high , but the

precentange

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percentage

decline considerable to

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approximately

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, the

house work

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housework

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decreas

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decrease

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gradually to arrived 10% In 201a.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

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Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

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Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

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166 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

ownership
electrical appliances
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time frame
variables
trends
significant milestones
turning points
correlation
reduction
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societal implications
quality of life
gender roles
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The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019.

Some high schools require all students to wear school uniforms. Other high schools permit students to decide what to wear to school. Which of these two school policies do you think is better? Use specific reasons and examples to support your opinion.

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It is sometimes said that people should be enouraged to get married before they turn 30, as this is best for both individuals and society, Do you agree or disagree?

Increasing housing problem in big city is a social consequences. Some people say that only government can solve this problem. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Some people say that giving a smaller amount of money weekly to children will help them become more capable as they grow older. Do you agree or disagree?