The chart below shows information about Heart Attacks by Age and Gender in USA. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. • You should write at least 150 words. • You should spend about 20 minutes on this task.

The chart below shows information about Heart Attacks by Age and Gender in USA. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

• You should write at least 150 words.

• You should spend about 20 minutes on this task.
The bar chart illustrates the percentage of world
illiteracy
rates in
last
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year, separated
in
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groups by region and gender.
Overall
,
highest
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the highest
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illiteracy
rate
is in South
Asia
,
while
the lowest
illiteracy
rate
is
on
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developed countries.
Females
illiteracy
rate
is higher than
males
. Some regions
has
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big gaps between
males
and
females
like East
Asia
/Oceania,
while
some regions
has
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smaller gaps between
males
and
females
like Latin
American
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/Caribbean. South
Asia
has the highest
illiteracy
rate
by
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more than 50%
on
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of
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females
and more than 30%
on
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males
. After South
Asia
, the second highest
illiteracy
rate
belongs to Arab States with approximately 50% in
females
and almost 30%
on
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in
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males
.
Females
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Females'
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illiteracy
rate
is higher than
males
on
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every region. Latin American/Caribbean has the lowest male and female
illiteracy
rate
gap, both male and female
illiteracy
rate
is around 10%.
However
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East
Asia
/Oceania has the highest gap between
male
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males
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and
female
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females
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on
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in
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illiteracy
rate
with under 10%
on
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for
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males
and 20%
on
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for
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females
.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Vocabulary: Replace the words illiteracy, rate, asia, females, males with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • occurrence
  • prevalence
  • age group
  • gender disparities
  • notable trends
  • significant
  • comparison
  • discrepancies
  • patterns
  • statistics
  • demographics
  • rate of incidence
  • proportion
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