Some people think that parents should read stories to their children while others argue that this is no longer necessary as we have modern technology such as television and films. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

The essay requires an opinion on whether parents should stick to reading stories for their descendants or should the modern technology
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. Children are innocent, but what they acquire from the outer world affects and shapes their personality. Elders usually think of younger as unaware of the cruelty
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world holds. It is true that the world has come so
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and the technology has become so advanced that a person may achieve any particular thing if they wish.
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wide variety of knowledge and stories that, if compared, parents can never think of. In lay terms, parents will never be able to achieve the
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structure
Present a clear introduction and conclusion and expand on individual points in each paragraph.
clarity
Clearly state both sides of the argument and provide specific examples to support your opinion.
coherence
Maintain a logical structure by connecting ideas with appropriate linking words to enhance the flow of the essay.
content
The essay introduces the topic of discussion.
coverage
The writer mentions both modern technology and traditional methods, showing an understanding of the topic.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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