In many countries, the quality of life in the large cities is worsening. What possibly can cause this problem? What measures can be taken to resolve it?
Countries are facing major
challanges
in their metro Correct your spelling
challenges
cities
. There are several factors
which are causing it to deteriorate their healthy lifestyle one of the major factors
are
living cost. Correct subject-verb agreement
is
This
essay will discuss the reasons and several possible solution
for Change to a plural noun
solutions
this
issue.
There are many major factors
involved in the fatal life
of city
people's
. The economic Change noun form
people
growth
of the countries largely depends on its major cities
it
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apply
produces
wealth for the government and promote Correct subject-verb agreement
produce
the
new industrialization projects and commercialization. Correct article usage
apply
For example
, cities
economic Change noun form
cities'
city's
growth
bring
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brings
the
foreign clients to invest in the country, which indirectly brings Correct article usage
apply
lot
of import and export and Add an article
a lot
fotreign
money Correct your spelling
foreign
tranfer
, which will largely contribute Correct your spelling
transfer
in
the country's economy.
Change preposition
to
However
the other Add a comma
However,
factors
are air
pollution
, water pollution
, health
of Add an article
the health
individual
and many more can affect directly or indirectly to the large Fix the agreement mistake
individuals
cities
. For example
, air
pollution
is the
major problem for the Correct article usage
a
cities
as the major import
and Fix the agreement mistake
imports
export
have been Fix the agreement mistake
exports
getting
done in metro Verb problem
apply
cities
, to over come
Correct your spelling
overcome
this
problem we have seen that many metropolitan cities
have been focusing on promoting public transport and using renewable energy sources for transport to reduce air
pollution
.
There are reports from many publication
have suggested that stressful Change to a plural noun
publications
city
life
and pollution
is
Correct subject-verb agreement
are
indrectly
causing issues in Correct your spelling
indirectly
the
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apply
people
's mental health as we have seen that stress and anxiety are more common in people
living in large cities
, to overcome this
problem local organization
of the Fix the agreement mistake
organizations
cities
can work on the statistical data to focus on the major issues. Ther
can be set up of local small organization to help Correct your spelling
They
people
overcome their stress and anixiety
issues which will Correct your spelling
anxiety
results
into their Change the verb form
result
heallthy
living Correct your spelling
healthy
life style
promoting Correct your spelling
lifestyle
healthy
Add an article
the healthy
growth
of country
.
In conclusion, I can state there are problems Add an article
the country
a country
such
as air
pollution
, economic grwoth
and Correct your spelling
growth
health
of Correct article usage
the health
people
are one
of the Correct determiner usage
some
factors
affecting the
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apply
city
life
, and we have also
discussed some solutions to over
Change preposition
apply
this
problems. So, in Correct determiner usage
these
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short
shorts
even small and tiny Add a comma
shorts,
factors
can also
affect the worsening of the metropolitan city
people
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people's
life
but small and tiny changes can Fix the agreement mistake
lives
also
bring a good changes
in healthy Correct the article-noun agreement
a good change
good changes
growth
lifestyle.Submitted by pearlshah2912 on
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coherence cohesion
You need to better organize your paragraphs and ensure a logical flow from one idea to another. Each paragraph should focus on a single main point and provide adequate support for it.
coherence cohesion
The introduction is clear but needs to provide an overview of the main points to be discussed. The conclusion should succinctly summarize the key points discussed in the essay.
task achievement
Ensure that you fully address both aspects of the task: identifying the causes of the worsening quality of life and proposing measures to resolve it. Currently, there is some lack of clarity and depth in these areas.
task achievement
Make sure that your ideas are clearly and comprehensively presented. Develop your points further and use specific examples to support your arguments. This will make your essay more persuasive and robust.
task achievement
Your essay addresses both parts of the prompt, discussing causes and proposing solutions.
task achievement
The use of examples, such as the economic contributions of cities and the promotion of public transport to combat pollution, enhances the relevance of your arguments.
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