Example 6: Many offenders commit more crimes after serving the punishment. Why are this happening, and what measures can be taken to tackle this problem?

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many culprits perform unlawful acts despite

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punishment

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phenomenon. To commence with the obstacle of

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phenomenon, most of the defendant execute offence after imposing the

punishment

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because they do not have the

skills

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to make their living standard high

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which

their

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commit crimes again and again

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when they come out of

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jail they face the same circumstances

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as

poverty

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while

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they have to live in

same

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condition, it

force

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them to commit

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offence .

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, one study has shown that in India 75% of crimes are committed

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poverty

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most

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offenders commit felonies

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poverty

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and lack of

skills

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. To tackle

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problem, the Government should take suitable measures to decrease the crime rate after

punishment

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they should provide a counsellor in the jail who will work on the thought-changing anger management strategies.It will help them to enhance their life

skills

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and to build up their strength.

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, they should be provided financial

support

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so that they can

support

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their families and themselves.

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, by providing a little financial

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many culprits may come out of

poverty

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and can move to another place for better living .

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, many culprits openly

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crimes after serving the

punishment

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because of

poverty

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and lack of

skills

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therefore

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government should tackle

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problem by providing them counselling and financial

support

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