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In the future all cars, buses and trucks will be driverless. The only people travelling inside these vehicles will be passengers. Do you think the advantage of driverless vehicles outweigh the disadvantages?

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In the
future
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future,
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 all
vehicles
 will be
driverless
 and only the
passesngers
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passengers
 will be
travelled
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travelling
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 by these
vehicles
. I personally believe that despite the risk
not
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of not
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 having control over the
vehicles
, the benefits of
driverless
vehicles
 do not outweigh the drawbacks because it saves
people
's
time
, energy and
life
.
Driverless
vehicles
 are not operated by
human
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humans
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 and they
are depending
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depend
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 on the
programme
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program
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 setting to function.
Therefore
, if there are any
mistake
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mistakes
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 in programme settings, the vehicle can cause
accident
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an accident
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.
Moreover
, if all
vehicles
 become
driverless
,
people
 will only stay in the car as a passenger. The enjoyment and thrilling experience of long driving will be lost at that
time
.
For example
, at present, in the
Uk
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UK
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, around 15% of
people
 are using
driverless
 cars, and they believe that they mostly miss driving their cars on their own.
However
, I believe that in today's fast-paced
life
, saving
time
 and energy is more important than enjoying the thrill of driving.
Driverless
vehicles
 save our
time
 and energy because
while
 commuting to the destination,
instead
 of driving, the passenger can concentrate on his own business. He can complete his pending tasks, talking over
phone
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the phone
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 or video calls and many more.
In addition
,
driverless
vehicles
 are free from some harmful driving behaviour of
human
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humans
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such
 as
drink
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drinking
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 and driving, and overspeeding.
This
 can save human
life
 from injury, death and loss of resources.
For instance
, in Canada, the rate of accidents has significantly decreased after
driverless
vehicles
 prevail.
Therefore
, I believe that saving valuable
life
 and resources is the biggest benefit of
driverless
car
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cars
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. In conclusion, despite having some drawbacks, the advantages of
driverless
car
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cars
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 far outweigh the disadvantages.
Although
 it will restrict
people
 from enjoying driving, it will save valuable
time
 and
life
.
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task response
To improve the task response, make sure your arguments are well-balanced. Presenting both the advantages and disadvantages more thoroughly would make your essay more compelling.
coherence cohesion
Ensure that each paragraph transitions smoothly to maintain coherence. For example, use phrases like 'on the other hand' or 'in contrast' to show the shift in arguments.
coherence cohesion
The essay has a strong introduction and conclusion, which helps in framing the overall argument well.
task response
The use of specific examples, like the situation in the UK and Canada, helps provide clear evidence for the points made.
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