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The charts below show the residential water use in 1998 and 2008.

The charts below show the residential water use in 1998 and 2008.
#show #water
The illustrations provide information about how people
use
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 the
water
 in 1988 and 2008.
Overall
,
water
 is mostly spent
for
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on
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 washing and
bathroom
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the bathroom
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. In 1988, individuals
use
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used
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 the largest amount of
water
 for washing(25%). The rate of
bathroom
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the bathroom
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 was lower by 3% than
first
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the first
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 one.
Moreover
,
the
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apply
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one fifth
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one-fifth
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 of
usage
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the usage
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 of
source
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the source
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 was for
garden
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the garden
a garden
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. The kitchen and toilet formed only 15% and 18% respectively.
Regarding
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In
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the
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apply
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2008, the usage of
water
 for
bathroom
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the bathroom
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is
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apply
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increased by 6% and complete
28
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by 28
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%.
However
, people
stared
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started
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waist by
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wasting
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 3% less
for
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on
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 washing and by 4%
for
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on
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toilet
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toilets
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. Purchases in the field of kitchen rocketed and reached a point
29
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of 29
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%.
Finally
, the proportion of using
water
 in
garden
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the garden
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 declined by 13%.
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words water with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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