The maps below show an industrial area in the town of Norbiton, and planned future development of the site.
The maps illustrate an industrial place now and a prediction of that area after updates.
Overall
, there are new buildings which are planned to construct
and a bridge with a new road in the south part of the town.
Now,Wrong verb form
be constructed
town
Add an article
the town
has
not Verb problem
does
got
any public-used buildings except accommodations and roads. Verb problem
have
Also
, the small rural area has a river
in
the top of Change preposition
at
map
with farmland crossing a Add an article
the map
river
.
However
, the government planned to build a school in the east part of the map
, which is connected by path
for housing areas . Correct article usage
a path
In addition
, the playgrounds are located under the river
, near the school. In the center
of the Change the spelling
centre
map
and in the south part of the map
, there are square paths. Between them, builders plan to construct a medical center
and shops. A new bridge Change the spelling
centre
Add a missing verb
is planed
planed
to build crossing the Correct your spelling
planned
river
in the centre. Lastly
, farmland is changed location and placed bit Easter than thenc
Correct your spelling
the
then
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words river, map with synonyms.
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