The graph shows changes in the sales of musical instruments in the UK from 2008 to the present and gives predictions for future sales.
The line chart illustrates the number of four kinds of musical instruments which were sold in the UK over the period of 13 years and
also
predicts the future.
In general, the percentage of these instruments dropped strongly during the period. In addition
, Guitars had the highest point for sales
and Pianos had the lowest percentage for those years.
It is clearly seen that from 2008 – 2011, all instruments sales
decreased strongly, at around 5%, except trumpets, just
fell over 1%.
Correct pronoun usage
which just
However
, after 2011, guitars and
drums and percussion increased dramatically Correct word choice
apply
for
Change preposition
in
sales
, and the proportion of guitars reached a peak at about 23% before falling down by half at the end
. And about drums and percussion, the number of sales
fluctuated before remained stable from 2016 and stood at almost 10% at the end
of the period. Turning to the sales
of trumpets and pianos, both of them went down before rising slightly from 2019 at around 5% and 4% respectively in 2020-2021.Submitted by duyuyen18 on
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