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The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The graph shows the
percentage
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 of
people
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 living in countries
such
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 as the Philippines, Malaysia,
Thailand
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 and
Indonesia
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 over a 70-year period. In general, Malaysia has shown the most growth.
Whereas
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Thailand
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 has had the least . Starting from the beginning of 1970 we can see a good trend of increasing
percentage
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 of
people
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 in urban areas. But in 1990 the
percentage
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 of Filipinos started to fall slightly. By the year
2000
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2000,
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Indonesia
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 and
Thailand
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 had equalized, because the latter’s percentages did not change.
Indonesia
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 continued to grow steadily and by 2010 they were already equal to the Philippines. In the same year, the Philippines again began to increase the
percentage
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 of
people
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 in the city.
According to
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 forecasts for 2024 to 2040,
people
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 will not stop moving to cities and the
percentage
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 will continue to grow. The biggest dynamics is seen in Malaysia with more than 54% which should reach 84% by 2040, not far behind
Indonesia
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 with about 44%. And the smallest increase is in
Thailand
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 with only 30
percent
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per cent
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.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words percentage, people, thailand, indonesia with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 6 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • household appliances
  • time-efficient
  • labour-saving devices
  • technological innovations
  • ownership rate
  • housework chores
  • domestic workload
  • automation
  • advancements
  • trend analysis
  • societal shifts
  • economic impact
  • durability
  • lifespan of appliances
  • maintenance
  • historical comparison
  • time allocation
  • drudgery reduction
  • energy consumption
  • disruption in trends
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