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You are having problems with a neighbour’s animals because the fence between your properties is old and In poor repair. You want the neighbour to pay half the cost of building a new fence. Write a letter to your neighbour. In your letter: say what the problems are explain how a new fence will solve the problems suggest that the neighbour pays half of the cost

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Dear Mr Shah, I hope
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 letter finds you well. I am writing
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 letter to inform you about the issues I am facing currently because of the fence condition we have between our houses.
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, I would like to share that your dog 'Shiro' and its two puppies often come to my side when they are playing in the evening time. They come through the holes we have in our fence. The reason behind the holes is because the construction of our boundary's wood is very poor in condition and it is very old too, maybe more than 15 years.
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, I request you to think about having a new enclosure as it will help both of us in
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 situation.
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, you can have your pets within your properties and I will not have to worry about bringing them back to you as I have a 3-year-old kid and she is scared of your dog too. I would appreciate it if you would contribute 50% of the
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 expenses for constructing the new wooden boundaries from both sides. At
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, I will only request you take
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 as a positive thing between us and let me know if you have any questions. Please and thank you. Yours faithfully, Shreya.

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task achievement
Your letter clearly addresses the problems arising from the old fence and explains how a new fence will solve these problems. To improve your score, you could provide more detailed descriptions and concrete examples to enhance clarity.
coherence cohesion
The letter is well-organized and maintains a logical flow. Each paragraph focuses on a single main idea, which helps in understanding your concerns. To achieve a higher score, ensure that each point is elaborated fully to add depth to your explanations.
suitable writing tone
The tone of the letter is polite and respectful, maintaining good neighborly relations while addressing the issue at hand.
greeting and closing
The letter has a clear structure with an introduction, body paragraphs, and a closing statement. The use of appropriate greetings and closing helps in maintaining formality.
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