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The bar graph below represents the data about the clubs joined by the people of two different age groups at a leisure center. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should Club preferences by age range

The bar graph below represents the data about the clubs joined by the people of two different age groups at a leisure center. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should Club preferences by age range
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The bar chart indicates the information about the average of clubs joined in leisure time separated by two different
age
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 groups.
Overall
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, it is clear to see that arts, crafts and cycling are popular in a
group
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 of middle-aged
age
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 Alternatively, gardening is counted as an interest in the
group
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 of older
people
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.
However
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, photography, music/dance and fitness have a similar number.
To begin
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 with, the percentage of middle
people
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 is calculated by
people
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 who are between 25 and 35. It is noticeable to see that cycling is popular in
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age
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group
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 approximately close to 70%
as well as
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 arts and crafts with 50% of
people
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 interested in these activities.
While
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, the total of
people
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 who choose photography, fitness and music/dance is a very similar number around 45-60%.
Moreover
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, gardening is unpopular in
this
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age
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group
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 just only 25% interest in it. Meanwhile, the ages of
people
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 between 55-65 years old around 55% are mindful of gardening.
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, only 10-15%% of
people
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 spend their leisure time cycling, and doing arts and crafts.
Nevertheless
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, photography, fitness and music/dance are more similar numbers than other groups when compared to around 45-50%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words age, group, people with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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