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The graph shows the number of people taking part in 4 kinds of sports in a particular region between 1985 and 2005.. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph shows the number of people taking part in 4 kinds of sports in a particular region between 1985 and 2005.. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The chart gives the
number
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 of people in four sports sections in a particular region between 1985 and 2005.
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,
basketball
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 and badminton are almost constant, with no rise or fall and rugby shows a significant decrease in rate from 1985 reaching 2005 and the opposite is tennis which increased from 1985 until 2005. Starting in 1985 rugby began to go down a little reaching 1995 and after that, it showed a high decrease in
number
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 it was 250 in 1985 and became just 200 in 1995 from that until 2000 lost 50 in
number
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, tennis was 150 in 1985 and it went up to 200 in 1995 and counting with a small increase reaching to 230 in 2005.
Basketball
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 and badminton were in a straight line from 1985
basketball
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 was almost 70 and badminton was 50, and in 2005 they were still standing, but
basketball
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 is a little high in
number
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.

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Linking words: Add more linking words.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, basketball with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "go down" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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