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32.The chart below shows women aged from 16 to 25 in particular country who prefer to watch or participate in a variety of sports. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

32.The chart below shows women aged from 16 to 25 in particular country who prefer to watch or participate in a variety of sports. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
#women #country #variety #sports #information #features #comparisons
The bar chart
illustrate
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illustrates
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 how many
women
who
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apply
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at
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apply
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aged
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age
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of
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apply
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16 -25 watched and participated in six different types of sports (
tennis
,
althetics
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athletics
, basketball, badminton, golf and horse riding and racing) in
certaint
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certain
nation
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nations
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 in 2000. 
Overall
, the percentage of
women
watched
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who watched
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sport
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sports
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 is higher than that
participated
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who participated
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.
Moreover
,
tennis
 was the greatest in
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the propotion
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propotion
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proportion
 of
women
 who watched. The percentage of
women
 who watched
tennis
 was the highest, which was 50%,triple that in
althestic
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aesthetic
. The
sencond
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second
 rank belonged to basketball with approximately 17%. About 10%
women
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of women
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watched
waatched
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watched
 golf, that
double
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doubles
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 the proportion of
women
 who watched badminton and horse riding and racing In
term
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terms
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 of participating, there was 20% of
women
 who took part in
tennis
, and
similarly
 in the percentage of
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athletic
aesthetic
 and basketball, which was around 20% and 22% respectively. The greatest proportion was seen in golf with 30% and around 18% was witnessed in horse riding and racing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words women, tennis with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • participation rate
  • popularity
  • preference
  • trend
  • compare
  • contrast
  • notable differences
  • cultural factors
  • social influences
  • predict
  • data
  • evident
  • sporting activities
  • age group
  • demographic
  • engage in sports
  • viewership
  • spectators
  • gender-specific trends
  • analyze
  • summarize
  • percentage
  • notable
  • significant
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