Some people think that we learn best through in person interaction with the teacher in a classroom. Others believe that learning is more effective. Discuss both views and give your own opinion

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of people believe that it is better to
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learn
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the teacher
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in a class. In my opinion,
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person who
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exactly what you need
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I support learning by yourself as it
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a
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of things. On the one hand, when
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decided
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by
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his own, he
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a
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of things in his personality and knowledge, as it
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him to learn how to search and find the best information for his
study
, being independent,
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cognitive
development and enhance his awareness and
also
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for what he
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.For
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example
, a
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don't
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go to university
for studying
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, they
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study
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by themself and now they are successful people who have their own business.
Therefore
, I firmly believe the journey of learning
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on the student.
On the other hand
, learning with
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the teacher
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can
also
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, as
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educator knows the perfect way for the student to learn the topic and be able to be good at it, but it can negatively impact
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the student it may make him lazy and only reliance on the professor, didn't search about different resource and expanding his knowledge.
For instance
, a
study
conducted by
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revealed that 30% of students
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graduate from college
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focus just
in
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on
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their
study
materials and they have problems
with found
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finding
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the right information.
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teacher
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can make
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students
more confident about what
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they
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learn
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and help
him
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them
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to achieve
his
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goals. In conclusion, learning is the best way to make
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people better, but
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before
that they need
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to learn
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how to learn and to achieve that they need to
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explain
their skills and be more attractive
also
the important thing is
love
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to love
loving
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what they
study
.
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Provide clearer, more detailed examples to support your arguments. Highlight concrete scenarios or data to show real-life application where possible.
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Work on improving the accuracy of your language use and sentence structure. While minor inaccuracies won't significantly impact your score, clarity and precision are crucial.
Coherence and Cohesion
The essay provides a clear introduction and conclusion, giving the reader a sense of completeness.
Task Achievement
There is a genuine attempt to discuss both views thoroughly, showing an understanding of the topic.

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  • clarification
  • complex topics
  • dynamic learning environment
  • social interaction
  • productive discussions
  • collaboration
  • communication skills
  • retention of material
  • flexible learning
  • travel time
  • fixed schedules
  • different learning paces
  • online learning
  • digital tools
  • interactive quizzes
  • multimedia content
  • discussion forums
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  • immediacy
  • lab work
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