Some people think that it is best to live in a vertical city (meaning that people work and live in high buildings) while others think a horizontal city is better. Discuss both views and give your opinion.
A home is a place for living. Humans always have different opinions of where to live. Some people suppose that living in a high building is the best place for them and others do have not the same idea. In
this
essay I am going to discuss both aspects Linking Words
then
I will give my opinion.
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First,
staying in skyscrapers and high-rise structures means Linking Words
that is
a vertical city. Undoubtedly, humanity always has wanted to see more than their sights. Linking Words
Hence
, they have decided to build taller structures. Linking Words
For example
, the first tallest building in Iran which is called Shamsolemare was built by the king. It has three floors Linking Words
in addition
has an eye-catching view. Linking Words
Thus
, it is obvious individuals have always looked for the best view and facilities in their lives. Another advantage of a vertical city is related to the price of land. Linking Words
For instance
, in megacities the lands of buildings are expensive. Linking Words
Therefore
, building more houses in a specific place makes it cheaper for everybody to buy a new home. Linking Words
However
, these places are crowded, and facilities might be less than the population.
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Second,
horizontal cities which have shorter buildings like apartments and villas remind me of old movies. These types of towns usually are placed surrounding metropolises. Clearly, these kinds of residences need more places which usually have yards or pools in them. Frankly, these kinds of accommodations are my choice. In fact, many facilities which were mentioned before Linking Words
such
as a pool and a specific garden for any families are needed and I really want to have these in my home in the future.
In summary, both views of people about short or high buildings to live in have advantages and disadvantages. In my aspect, if I want to live with my family members I will decide horizontal lands. Linking Words
However
, if I have to live alone I will choose verticals.Linking Words
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task response
Your essay covers both views and provides an opinion, which fulfills the task. However, you need to elaborate more on each point to strengthen your argument. For instance, you could discuss the social aspects of living in a vertical versus horizontal city.
coherence cohesion
Your transitions could be smoother to enhance coherence. Phrases like 'Firstly,' 'Secondly,' or 'On the other hand' can help the reader follow your argument more easily.
coherence cohesion
You have a decent logical structure, but the conclusion needs to be stronger. Summarize main points and clearly reiterate your opinion.
task response
You used personal examples and historical context effectively to support your points.
coherence cohesion
Your essay is generally well-organized, with a clear introduction, body, and conclusion.