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Nowadays, people have little awareness of the importance of the natural world. What are the reasons and how can people learn more about the natural world?

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These days, many
people
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are not pay
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 attention to
protect
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protecting
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 the natural
world
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.
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 essay will explore the reasons
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this
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 less awareness and provide several resolutions to make individuals educate
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 that matter. In
contemporary
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world
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,
people
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 pay less attention to the natural
world
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.
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 is because there is an inadequate education in schools and universities to make
people
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 more conscious. Without knowing about the natural
world
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 we cannot expect anyone to try to protect
wilde
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wild
 life.
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, many individuals live in cities
that
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and
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 they cannot find an opportunity to interact with the natural
world
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, when I was
live
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 in the town, I have not an idea about the care of species and animals in the
world
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 .
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, if society
not
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 involved
to
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in
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 the natural
world
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, the residents of it will not develop a sense of protection for
wild
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world
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. To examine
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 situation, I would recommend
to organize
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 some events that primarily focus
to introduce
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on introducing
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 natural
beauty's
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beauties
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 to the public.
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, schools may organize some trips to zoos to spread awareness to the younger generations.
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, social media networking
have
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 to contribute
into
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this
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ambitious
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 as they
effect
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affect
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 many
people
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's perspectives significantly. They can put some slogans in their applications to emphasize the importance of the natural
world
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. These strategies will create a proper chance for
people
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 to explore and learn about wild
live
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. In conclusion, the major causes of less public concern about the natural
world
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 are ineffective education
system
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 and less general knowledge
due to
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 lack of experience with the natural
world
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. To address
this
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 issue,
promote
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organization
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an organization
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 that introduces natural values is essential .
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, cooperation with social media applications
play
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 a vital role
to encourage
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in encouraging
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 individuals to care about the natural
world
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task achievement
Ensure that your ideas are fully developed and supported with specific examples. Try to provide more detailed explanations and concrete examples to illustrate your points, particularly in relation to the reasons for decreasing awareness of the natural world.
general advices
There are some grammar and vocabulary errors that slightly affect understanding. Ensure subject-verb agreement (e.g., "many people are not pay attention" should be "many people do not pay attention"); check verb tenses for consistency (e.g., "when I was live in the town" should be "when I lived in town"); and improve word choice and collocations (e.g., "contribute into this ambitious" should be "contribute to this cause"). Consider revising sentences for clarity and accuracy.
coherence cohesion
Ensure your essay has a logical flow and structure. Clearly delineate your arguments and develop them coherently. For example, focus more on connecting ideas within paragraphs and using appropriate linking words and phrases.
introduction conclusion present
The introduction and conclusion are present and adequately summarize the main points of the essay. This provides a clear framework for your argument.
task achievement
You address the task prompt directly and provide a complete response by identifying reasons for the problem and offering solutions. This shows a good understanding of the task requirements.
supported main points
Your main points are generally relevant and appropriate. The ideas presented are clear and logical, which facilitates understanding of your arguments.

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