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The plans below show a harbour in 2000 and how it looks now.

#plans #show #harbour
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The maps illustrate the improvements made in
a
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the
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harbour
, the differences were between 2000 and now.
Overall
, there are several changes in
this
harbour
. The plans indicate some areas that were replaced, removed,
added
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and added
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 to the
harbour
.
According to
 what is depicted, in 2000, there was a castle in the
south right
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 corner,
also
 there was a public beach next to the castle. Nowadays, the castle was demolished and replaced with a hotel.
In addition
, the hotel
have
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has
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 a good view
on
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of
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 the beach which became specifically for the hotel ,
also
 now there is a pass to the main road. Previously, there was
not a
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no
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 refreshment source, but now they construct cafes and shops
nearby
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near
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 the
life boat
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lifeboat
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. In the
past
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past,
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 there was only
one
 entry to the parking from the main road. Recently, they built a new entry to the parking area.
While
 there was only a dock, now there is an additional
one
. In 2000, it is shown that there was
one
bathrooms
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bathroom
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 zone. Currently, there is
one
 more.
To sum up
, it can be said that there were many enhancements in the
harbour
. Now there are more facilities which could assist the workers and visitors.
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task achievement
Work on ensuring that each main point is supported with relevant examples for clarity.
coherence cohesion
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coherence cohesion
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coherence cohesion
Your introduction and conclusion are present, providing a clear structure to the essay.
task achievement
You provided relevant and specific examples to illustrate the changes in the harbour.

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    • Sentence 2 - Example
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • multi-purpose building
  • recreational facilities
  • maritime safety
  • leisure destination
  • tourism-focused
  • infrastructure improvements
  • pedestrian promenade
  • landmark
  • expanded roads
  • transport infrastructure
  • industrial use
  • cruise ship terminal
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