The maps show changes that took place in grange park over a 124 years period between 1920 and 2024.

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The maps illustrate how a community

park

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has evolved from its opening in 1920 to its current state today.

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,over the years,several significant

change

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have been made to modernize the

park

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and offer a wider range of activities and facilities to visitors. In 1920, the

park

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was designed with classic features including a central fountain, a stage for live performances, and a glasshouse. The

park

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also

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contained three rose gardens and had plenty of seating arranged around the fountain and stage.

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,today’s

park

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layout

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more modern elements. The original fountain has been replaced by a new rose garden with extra seating. The stage has been replaced by an

amphitheater

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, which accommodates more people for concerts. The glasshouse has been substituted with a water feature, and the pond for aquatic plants has been transformed into a play area for children.

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, one of the rose gardens had been transformed into a

cae

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car

,offering more facilities for visitors.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

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Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

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Grammatical Range: 6.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

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4 paragraphs

159 words

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The maps show changes that took place in grange park over a 124 years period between 1920 and 2024.

Some people believe that nowadays we have too many choices. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Increasing the price of petrol is the best way to solve growing traffic and pollution problems. To what extent do you agree or disagree? What other measures do you think might be effectiv